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@SapphireBandit Good job with this article so far. Looks pretty good right now. I've tagged the article for having a long plot section since it's only 5 words under the limit. Make sure to trim some unnecessary parts off so the article doesn't get carried away in the story. Note that story elements should only be included assuming that every/most players will see them in a playthrough. WP:VGMOS can help with writing video game articles. Cheers. Tarlby (t) (c) 16:54, 22 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks @Tarlby, I appreciate the second set of eyes on this article. The plot section is definitely the lowest quality part of the article at the moment, I trimmed it down to under 700 words for when I moved the article out of draft space, but there's still definitely a lot to be desired. As long as its not indexed yet I should be fine(gotta get into the NPP queue as quick as possible anyways), but the situation with that section is honestly pretty funny. I'm still in the process of fully finishing Look Outside without spoilers, and although describing vital endings can be fine, I pretty much have to wait until I can finally be fully comprehensive. Anyways, I've been currently working on expansions to the Reception and Development sections, so when those are finished I'm probably gonna revamp Plot. Ironically, with new, more basic endings I now have since the creation of the article on the 14th, I now have quite a few more things to add, but now coming back with a fresh pair of eyes I'm already seeing some stuff I can omit or simplify so it shouldn't be that bad.
Thanks once again for your input, gonna temporarily remove the reassessment request until I'm done with that, I'll probably be working towards a good article ranking while I'm waiting to be indexed. And hey, if I'm lucky, someone with autopatrolled might notice the page if it gets promoted to GA-status. Anyhow, thanks once again for the help, and good luck with the Rain World article! I'm a bit backed up with Look Outside right now, but Rain World's page looks amazing right now, and I'll be sure to come back to it soon! SapphireBandit (talk) 22:31, 22 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

GA review

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Nominator: SapphireBandit (talk · contribs) 00:50, 13 May 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 08:58, 23 June 2025 (UTC)[reply]


Will review soon. Jaguar (talk) 08:58, 23 June 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Lead
  • "leading to its developer Francis Coulombe working with others" - Coulombe has already been introduced, so I would delete the emboldened text
  • " the full version of the game was simultaneously announced and released by video game publisher Devolver Digital" - remove, the publisher was already introduced
  • The lead summarises the article well, so no issues here
Body
  • "...using the RPG Maker game engine, with its music being made by Eric Shumaker" - this would be better if broken with a full stop
  • "Francis had been in contact with video game publisher" - informal, use his surname in all instances
  • "announced by Devolver Digital and released to Steam on March 21, 2025" - on Steam
  • "...compelled to move forward, with Lucas White of Shacknews similarly describing the game" - this is a very long unbroken sentence which would read better if split. Eg. compelled to move forward. Likewise, Lucas White of Shacknews described the game...

Overall this is a well-written article and is comprehensive enough to meet the GA criteria. The sources are all of high quality, and it was a smooth read. Other than those minor points raised, I see no reason to put this review on hold, and will promote it outright. I still highly recommend you implement the changes, though they do not subtract from the criteria. Well done. Jaguar (talk) 10:44, 23 June 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Peer review

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Look Outside

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Looking for suggestions and help before I submit the article for FA consideration. I've already noted a complex and time consuming change I could make to fix a possibly fine rule violation(the Plot sections word count), but an outside perspective on the matter as well as general help would be much appreciated.

Thanks, SapphireBandit (talk) 17:45, 12 August 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hey SapphireBandit, are you still interested in comments here, or can this be closed? You may also want to look into an FAC mentor, since it looks like this would be your first nomination. Let me know either way! —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 16:29, 24 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]
I'm still interested. I do not need assistance with the candidacy, but a quick outside perspective from someone else would be helpful, so I would like to keep this open for the time being. SapphireBandit (talk) 22:19, 24 September 2025 (UTC)[reply]

PlayStation five

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This game needs to be on PlayStation five. It deserves to be honest. 199.115.144.33 (talk) 20:56, 30 August 2025 (UTC)[reply]