User talk:Bernthefirst

Your submission at Articles for creation: Hali Welly (July 2)

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Jlwoodwa was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit after they have been resolved.
jlwoodwa (talk) 02:24, 2 July 2025 (UTC)[reply]
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Hello, Bernthefirst! Having an article draft declined at Articles for Creation can be disappointing. If you are wondering why your article submission was declined, please post a question at the Articles for creation help desk. If you have any other questions about your editing experience, we'd love to help you at the Teahouse, a friendly space on Wikipedia where experienced editors lend a hand to help new editors like yourself! See you there! jlwoodwa (talk) 02:24, 2 July 2025 (UTC)[reply]
I appreciate your feedback on the review. After reading your feedback and going through the draft I submitted, I realized I made several errors. With the references, I cite some of the references improperly and even placed a few references by the wrong block of text. I am embarrassed by my bad referencing and I should have taken my time to proofread. I noticed also wrote it so it sounds nice which I think gave it the vagueness, promotional tone, and essay-like flow.
I have made the necessary corrections so it is a factual piece that is straight to the point. I have rewritten everything and adjusted the tone and style so it is neutral. I gone through all the references and corrected all mistakes. I really hope you can review it once again. Also, I will appreciate any direct mistake you can point out. This is my first submission. Bernthefirst (talk) 18:49, 2 July 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: Hali Welly (July 3)

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Afstromen was:  The comment the reviewer left was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit after they have been resolved.
Afstromen (talk) 09:03, 3 July 2025 (UTC)[reply]